A New Spin?

One of the benefits of leaving my i-pod at home was that I was able to get some work done on the train home from NYC. I came up with some radical changes for the script, and whether or not they stay or go, I think they've really helped changed my perspective.

For starters, I'm considering turning Landon into Alex's brother. The problem with having him as a love interest for Alex is that their relationship has to be addressed consistently, and in the end when they break up, we have to believe that their reasons were legitimate. The problem being, the story isn't about Landon as it is about Alex and Armaan. So why spend extra time on the two of them when really they don't count? I was thinking that may Alex tells Armaan that Landon is her boyfriend/fiance so that he'll back off and not try to pursue something. In an effort to prove to Alex that he too is taken, Armaan will tell her about his 'relationship' with Mona. This will prevent Alex from explaining to Armaan that she lied about Landon, once she develops feelings for him. The other adjustment is that Maya is planning on leaving the company to start her own event planning firm but is afraid to say anything to Armaan. Alex will be the one who convinces her to do so, which gives Armaan more basis to dislike Alex. The third big adjustment is that I want to add five characters to the office; they are a little less than supporting characters, but their presence in the office will help to sort of support the main story, and it will provide moments for genuine interaction.

That's the other thing. After seeing Superbad, I thought it was interesting that the first scene revolved so much around casual conversation. There is no expert writing there, but because the conversation follows such a simple, natural trajectory, it's really interesting to watch. How often do we see that? So, I'm thinking of adding a it of that element to this script. I think with a bar scene I have in mind, I can add a bit more depth to the main relationship.

We're going out somewhere, I don't know why. I'm in no mood. More later.